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Essay Writing の思考プロセス 第92回


今回の Topic は、2016年度早稲田大学政治経済学部の入試問題からです。

1. Topic           

       Do you agree or disagree; Smoking should be made illegal in Japan.”

2. Struture

a) Thesis Statement          

       I agree with the statement in terms of maintaining personal health and reducing personal and social costs in Japan. 

b) Body の部分を構成する3つの Paragraph の Main Idea は、

第1 Paragraph 喫煙を非合法化することで、喫煙者の健康維持に貢献する

第2 Paragraph 喫煙が禁止されることで、煙草の購入費用を他の健康的あるいは生産的な目的に転用できる

第3 Paragraph 喫煙を非合法化することで、日本の社会、自然環境を改善できる

3. Sample

     I agree with the statement in terms of maintaining personal health and reducing personal and social costs in Japan.             

     To begin with, medical experts unanimously agree that smoking is detrimental to health.  Specifically speaking, smoking causes damage to nearly every organ in the body and is directly responsible for a number of diseases.  It is also important to note that mortality rate of those who habitually smoke is four to five times higher than that of those who don’t smoke.  According to one estimate, 120,000 to 150,000 people die from smoking related diseases.  Therefore, legal ban on smoking should be extremely beneficial to personal health.              

     In addition, stopping buying tobacco would have very positive effect not only on personal health but also on personal financial situation.  Steadily increasing prices of tobacco could account for significant part of private consumption expenditure.  For instance, standard price for a pack of cigarette is around 500 hundred yen, which means that it takes a smoker about 15,000 yen a month.  By giving up smoking, this amount of money could divert to healthier and more productive spending.      

     Finally, prohibiting smoking would have positive impact on Japanese society.  It has been pointed out that smoking affects very negatively on both social and natural environment.  Those who fall victim to serious diseases due to direct or indirect effect of smoking have consumed precious medical resources.  As a result, health care costs have skyrocketed over the past decades.  Moreover, disposed cigarette ends in the streets have harmed natural environment.  Making smoking illegal should resolve these man-made social problems.       

     It is true that smoking was and still is prevalent for many Japanese males.  However, because of the three reasons I mentioned above, I agree with the statement.


To be continued.